Tuesday, 9 April 2013

My Night At A Haunted House By Emma Burrows :)

My Night At A Haunted House       By Emma Burrows :)https://docs.google.com/document/d/1QGpqTK6e7u4kNYCmwKqm1Ow2WIWX8ZB2KMR9DXlzogo/edit?usp=sharing
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11 comments:

  1. Anonymous9 April 2013 at 21:17

    Hi Emma

    What a great description you have created! Here is some writing from Caleb in Room 14 at GMS. I have copied your link to show him as well.

    http://bunchaboysgms.blogspot.co.nz/2013/04/nortons-hut.html?showComment=1365567363540#c1138444047479176770

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  2. room 610 April 2013 at 16:41

    lovely work EMMA i love how you said you got draged into a closet. ALEX HART ;)

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  3. Unknown10 April 2013 at 17:33

    Nice story Emma i like how you said how you felt

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  4. Mr Woo10 April 2013 at 19:32

    Hi Emma, nice piece of writing. My teacher and I read it and we thought it was great. He liked your 'fractured window' sentence, but I really liked the image of the photos on the wall. I could see it like I was there. (Caleb Anderson, logged on using using Mr Woods profile-I hacked it!!!)

    P.S Jo says "hi"
    P.P.S I say 'Hi too"
    P.P.P.S no more PSs
    P.P.P.P.S. except for this one
    P.P.P.P.P.S ...and this one
    P.P.P.P.P.P.S...sorry.
    P.P.P.P.P.P.P.S...i'm really going now





    P.P.P.P.P.P.P.P.S....SURPRISE!!!

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  5. room 610 April 2013 at 21:16

    P.P.P.P.P.P.P.P.P.P very funny :} hehe and Hi Jo and Caleb :) Emma:)

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  6. room 610 April 2013 at 21:17

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  7. room 610 April 2013 at 21:17

    P.P.P.P.P.P.P.P.S*

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  8. Anonymous15 May 2013 at 04:08

    I really liked this story! It was really well written and described fantastically! I especially liked the cliff hanger!
    Well done!:)
    Emily Berry, Rhyddings

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  9. room 616 May 2013 at 16:18

    Hay Emma I like your story you have described it very well. I like the bit were you say I got a cold hard shiver down my spine. Your story ended in a awesome way.

    Awesome Story :)
    By Aaliyah

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  10. kevin20 May 2013 at 20:22

    Dear Emma,

    I think that your story is great.I like how you described how you felt and used figurative language.

    From kevin

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  11. Anonymous19 June 2013 at 15:40

    Hello Emma,
    I Like how you described what the haunted house looked like and it really hooks you in :)

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