I liked how you told me what you and Hannah were wearing and that you said you were nervous something you could improve on is describing the setting a bit better. from George G
Great story I really liked how you described what you were wearing because it makes the story better don't know how to explain.One thing could make it better correct gramma.
I liked how you told me what you and Hannah were wearing and that you said you were nervous something you could improve on is describing the setting a bit better. from George G
ReplyDeleteGreat story I really liked how you described what you were wearing because it makes the story better don't know how to explain.One thing could make it better correct gramma.
ReplyDeleteFrom Henry
Excellent story. I liked how you described what you were wearing and explained what your hair was looking like.
ReplyDeleteNext time you should proof-read and spell check.
From Paula
Thanks
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