I love the idea for the story. You have given a very good description of the perspective of life from a small person. From the way you write, I can imagine being picked up by the cat and taken for a ride. One thing you could work on is proof reading and looking for those small, but few, mistakes. Great job
my name is Holly and I'm from 56steps. I thought your text was full of despription, and was very creative.I found it very easy to picture an image in my head when I was reading your writing.
Very descriptive Amiee your writting is very advanced, you can write my reports for me. Keep up good work.:-P
ReplyDeleteBrendan (Dad)
Thank you!!! :D
DeleteHello,
ReplyDeleteMy name is Hannah and I am from St Elizabeth in Australia. I thought your writing was descriptive and interesting. you should keep on writing.
From Hannah
Very descriptive and awesome Amiee!
DeleteEverylittledetail was said!
from Lorenzo
I love the idea for the story. You have given a very good description of the perspective of life from a small person. From the way you write, I can imagine being picked up by the cat and taken for a ride.
ReplyDeleteOne thing you could work on is proof reading and looking for those small, but few, mistakes.
Great job
Dera Amiee,
ReplyDeleteYour story was very intresting and had poweful sentences. You had a couple of mistakes but other than that it was awesome.
great job.
from Rozetta
Hello,
ReplyDeletemy name is Holly and I'm from 56steps. I thought your text was full of despription, and was very creative.I found it very easy to picture an image in my head when I was reading your writing.
from Holly2
Cool story. I would like to be 10cm tall for a day.
ReplyDeleteKira
Kaharoa School
Hello,
ReplyDeleteMy name is Janelle I am from Kaharoa School. I enjoyed reading your story! It was very interesting.
From Janelle, Kaharoa School.
I liked that you used fullstops and commas.
ReplyDeleteNext time you should use interesting words to make your work interesting...! :)
Thanks, but I believe I did use interesting words. But is using full stops and commas the only thing I did right?
DeleteGreat story Amiee!
ReplyDelete-Kosmas, Riccarton Primary School