I liked the part "I leapt out of the plane withtremendous force." I liked it because it was realy descriptive. But perhaps you might consider to put you felt during the fall and what you felt like when the parachute went up.
Awesome story Ben!!!!!!! From Kelly
I liked the part "I leapt out of the plane with
ReplyDeletetremendous force." I liked it because it was realy descriptive. But perhaps you might consider to put you felt during the fall and what you felt like when the parachute went up.
Awesome story Ben!!!!!!! From Kelly
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