Hey Regan!this is an awesome piece of writing I loved it! It really hooked me in and felt like I myself was in the story, it was so descriptive! I like how you descibed the alien and the awesome names you came up for the characters! great job! :) a quick thought tho, you could imporve with describing the setting more :) great work!
I like how you said gaint blueberry jelly monster,you have described this story really well.I like how you said he was meant to be speaking alienish this story was awesome. Blake :) lolz
Things to work on: You never said you were in space which could be a bit confusing to some people, it sounds like he is on earth until the end which was confusing. Amiee :}
i like how you wrote he spoke alinish funny as reagan and how you hocked me in by saying he had a sour look on his face like in the west cowboy :-) lol thanks for your time cowboy from paddy lol blits
Great story Reagan.I like the bit where you said, he had a sour look on his face.Maybe you could of wrote a little bit more on your story. From Jess.
ReplyDeleteHey Regan!this is an awesome piece of writing I loved it! It really hooked me in and felt like I myself was in the story, it was so descriptive! I like how you descibed the alien and the awesome names you came up for the characters! great job! :) a quick thought tho, you could imporve with describing the setting more :) great work!
ReplyDeleteEmma :}
I like how you said gaint blueberry jelly monster,you have described this story really well.I like how you said he was meant to be speaking alienish this story was awesome.
ReplyDeleteBlake :) lolz
Things to work on: You never said you were in space which could be a bit confusing to some people, it sounds like he is on earth until the end which was confusing.
Amiee :}
i like how you wrote he spoke alinish funny as reagan and how you hocked me in by saying he had a sour look on his face like in the west cowboy :-) lol thanks for your time cowboy from paddy lol blits
ReplyDeleteNice story.
ReplyDeleteI like the description.
Next time you could maybe not make it so fast paced and slow down a bit.