I was bored so I went for a flight to space. when I got to mars I had to make a pit stop. I pulled in to bp and was filling my spacecraft up when this spacecraft rolled in. The alien got out and started fueling up.I was looking at him he had a nasty eyes with a sour look, his hair stood about 90 cms long in the air he was short and fat.His spacecraft was maxed out,he had little fat legs and short arms with pink eyes that would glow in the dark he was evil.He didn't say a word,he just flew away.
Awesome, very descriptive
ReplyDeleteIt sounds like a curious story and I liked how you described the alien really well. Although you could add some adjectives, such as curious or unique and so on and so fourth. Other than that it is such a great story.
ReplyDeleteGreat story just you could work on telling what your doing better
ReplyDeleteGreat description of a alien my favorite bit was 'with eyes that would glow in the dark.'- George m
ReplyDeleteAwesome story Reagan. I liked how you described the alien. You said that he had a sour look on his face. Maybe you can write a bit more about your alien. From Lititia.
ReplyDeleteHay whoever this is I like your story you described it very well I like how you put filled up at BP LOL
ReplyDeletehay, I liked your story it was very descriptive but I think that you should say a little more about the alien. I also liked how you said that he had a sour look.
ReplyDeleteGreat story, you described the alien really well. Next time maybe work on you ending.
ReplyDeleteHannah RPS