Hi EmmaWhat a great description you have created! Here is some writing from Caleb in Room 14 at GMS. I have copied your link to show him as well.http://bunchaboysgms.blogspot.co.nz/2013/04/nortons-hut.html?showComment=1365567363540#c1138444047479176770
lovely work EMMA i love how you said you got draged into a closet. ALEX HART ;)
Nice story Emma i like how you said how you felt
Hi Emma, nice piece of writing. My teacher and I read it and we thought it was great. He liked your 'fractured window' sentence, but I really liked the image of the photos on the wall. I could see it like I was there. (Caleb Anderson, logged on using using Mr Woods profile-I hacked it!!!)P.S Jo says "hi"P.P.S I say 'Hi too"P.P.P.S no more PSsP.P.P.P.S. except for this oneP.P.P.P.P.S ...and this oneP.P.P.P.P.P.S...sorry.P.P.P.P.P.P.P.S...i'm really going now P.P.P.P.P.P.P.P.S....SURPRISE!!!
P.P.P.P.P.P.P.P.P.P very funny :} hehe and Hi Jo and Caleb :) Emma:)
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I really liked this story! It was really well written and described fantastically! I especially liked the cliff hanger!Well done!:)Emily Berry, Rhyddings
Hay Emma I like your story you have described it very well. I like the bit were you say I got a cold hard shiver down my spine. Your story ended in a awesome way. Awesome Story :)By Aaliyah
Dear Emma,I think that your story is great.I like how you described how you felt and used figurative language.From kevin
Hello Emma, I Like how you described what the haunted house looked like and it really hooks you in :)