Tuesday, 28 May 2013

One Wish

https://docs.google.com/document/d/12FkH04U4EP8K4M9L6Bm7_CsjPmfQmtkFfT-8Ugyoy0Y/edit?usp=sharing

Hope you enjoy my story! (Smart writer assignment)

Emma Burrows :)

9 comments:

  1. Hi Emma. I really like your writing. It is improving a lot. I liked the end and how you get yourself into a situation where you can have any wish you want. But the pressure to choose quickly is too much. I imagine we all wish for something and when you finally get the chance you can't think of it. Well done, it was good.
    One thing I would improve on is proof reading your work and trying to find the little mistakes. It can make the difference between good and REALLY good writng.

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  2. Hi. My name is Kira. I go to Kaharoa School
    Cool story. I don't no what I would have wished for either. Probably another puppy!
    Kira
    Kaharoa School

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    1. Haha thanks! I didn't know what wish I wanted so I just stuck with not making one ;)

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  3. I enjoyed reading your story I how you explained how they spoke :) :) :) :) :) next time use paragraphs

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    1. Thanks! I couldn't use paragraphs because I was using this smart writer website and I needed better scores:)

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  4. Wow awesome, weird wish tho. Your writing is really cool!!!

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