Tuesday 26 March 2013

bens the day i met the space creature


The day I met the space creature

As I climbed on the spaceship the count down from 30 begun I zipped up the ladder to my seat. Just in time to as it went 3…2…1… lift of. The rockets fired into life. At 9:45. Mushin control said, “You are 10 mints away form the moon”. After 5 mints after that I could see the silver lining of the moon. Mushin control called back and said that they have lost control of the spaceship and its heading for a black hole. 2 seconds later I can see the black hole. All of a sudden a little green man pushes the spaceship out of the way and towards the moon. I owe my life to that little green man. 

7 comments:

  1. Lol good work funny story 10 mints lol ;)

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  2. Hay Ben I like your story and I think you have used very descriptive words. It all links together really well. I liked the bit when you said i zipped up the ladder. I think you need to work on your spelling. By Hannah

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  3. Great story Ben I really liked the part where you k3pt talking to mission control

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  4. Good story I like how you said I zipped up the ladder cool :D

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  5. It's an interesting story to read and has a little bit of the alien description. Maybe next time you could add a little more bit of describing the alien. The realistic parts is when mission control calls you a dozen times, that's what I like a lot.

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  6. Cool story the spelling of mission is wrong but still cool and my favourite bit was when the green man pushed the ship out of the black hole.-George m

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  7. Great story Ben some of your spelling is incorect ten mints I think you mean ten minutes, mushin control it's mission control.I like how you put the green man pushed your spaceship away from the black hole. BY ALEX HART

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