Hi this is Kelly. Whoever wrote this story had some awesome ideas and they all tied together really well. You have described the characters well and all the time I just had to read more. I was gutted when the story ended because I hoped there would be more. Well done!!!
This is a great story! It was very descriptive:)
Hello,our names our Aleksandra and Mary and we are from St Elizabeths Parish school.We really enjoyed this story. Aleksandra's favourite moment was when Bob screamed, " AHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!". Next time maybe check your spelling again. Other than that, we loved it! Awesome work!From,Aleksandra and Mary.
Hi everyone this is mikkel.That was a good story and I like how you left the ending to the reader i realy like this story.We also are doing something like thing this but we call it powerful paragraph.from Mikkel