Thursday, 23 May 2013

THE DAY I JUMPED OUT OF A PLANE by alex hart

                  PLUMMETING  
 WALT : Use descriptive language to make writing more interesting.

As I secured my goggles to my helmet and strapped my boots on, my stomach churning as I stepped to the edge. I lothe heights but I know that the Ahaura townsfolk would be cheering for me down below as I was about to say no I felt a vicious shove in the back and before I knew it I was plummeting 3000 feet.

6 comments:

  1. great story it makes me feel like I'm jumping out of the plane myself and the shove in the back was very unexpecteted.

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  2. thats great it was very rell life i was hocked in strat away lol thanks for your time




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  3. Hey Alex,

    My names Mary and im from St Elizabeths, one of your QuadBlogging schools.

    This was awesome. There was a lot of descriptive words and it was very clear. You described everything perfectly. Awesome job and I hope you write more soon.

    From,
    Mary.

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    1. Thanks a lot I look forward to writing and posting more of my writing I will soon be publishing the day I met a space creature

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  4. That is a really cool story with great adjectives.
    Alice.C Kaharoa

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