I must say Lititia, it was not the ending I was expecting. I really like the way you used modern language such as "whatever" and "you egg". I think it will make other readers relate to it easier. One thing I would suggest perhaps changing is when you say "Some time later when the Giant was nearly to the bottom". It sounds like the giant is taking ages to get down to the bottom. You could change it to "the giant was quickly reaching the bottom". Apart from that I enjoyed the story.
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I must say Lititia, it was not the ending I was expecting. I really like the way you used modern language such as "whatever" and "you egg". I think it will make other readers relate to it easier. One thing I would suggest perhaps changing is when you say "Some time later when the Giant was nearly to the bottom". It sounds like the giant is taking ages to get down to the bottom. You could change it to "the giant was quickly reaching the bottom". Apart from that I enjoyed the story.
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