I like the complication you have created in this story with Cinderella being locked in the cupboard at the Palace and being found by the prince after 12 o'clock. However there a lot of typing mistakes and still lots of editing to be done. I would go back and read each sentence again. Even try "I think this means" and see if you can recognise where you need to make changes.
I like this story and i like that the prince saves her anyway. But I think it could be edited better but you can get better at that. The story was good.
Nice story, Reuben. I liked your creativity and ideas when writing this passage, but I think you need to work on your punctuation and spelling. Overall, well done on your story and keep progressing with your creative writing nature.
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ReplyDeleteI like the complication you have created in this story with Cinderella being locked in the cupboard at the Palace and being found by the prince after 12 o'clock. However there a lot of typing mistakes and still lots of editing to be done. I would go back and read each sentence again. Even try "I think this means" and see if you can recognise where you need to make changes.
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ReplyDeleteWhat a great descrpitive story that you have made.
Our class uses google docs aswell when we had to do our scienced fair project.
From Daniel p3 Mokoia Intermediate
I like this story and i like that the prince saves her anyway. But I think it could be edited better but you can get better at that. The story was good.
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Nice story, Reuben.
ReplyDeleteI liked your creativity and ideas when writing this passage, but I think you need to work on your punctuation and spelling. Overall, well done on your story and keep progressing with your creative writing nature.
It was a good story but the spelling needs a lot of improvement and a heap of editing needs to be done
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