Thursday 7 March 2013

bens writing

 ben wirting



https://docs.google.com/file/d/0B0qzc5r_YD_dQ05QSm1QVmNxcms/edit?usp=sharing

2 comments:

  1. I liked the part "I leapt out of the plane with
    tremendous force." I liked it because it was realy descriptive. But perhaps you might consider to put you felt during the fall and what you felt like when the parachute went up.

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  2. Awesome story Ben!!!!!!! From Kelly

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