Monday 9 September 2013

Troy's awesome story

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1j_1RXYlwPG9zoGRyUoPI25bKP76WbeiHP1K1gEi5YpU/edit?usp=sharing

8 comments:

  1. How was my swag story ???????

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  2. Hi Troy, its Kelly here. Your story was definately SWAG and I loved every bit of it. By the way, the story ending is soooooo cute. :)

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  3. Swaglish story Troy I guess that's why it's called 'TROYS AWESOME STORY'- by Karim and James

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  4. Hi Troy, it's Regan here, I reckon your story is awesome. What I find awesome is how descriptive it was. The one thing I'd improve on is when some character is talking. I got a little lost when they started talking but it is a really swag story. ;)

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  5. I agree that some aspects of the descriptive language were very good such as "He returned with three strange glowing beans". However, I also agree with Regan that some of the dialogue was a little difficult to follow. I would go back and see if you can't make it a little easier to follow.

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  6. i like the story described alot

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