Cool I liked how you described whatever that was that i forgot.
Nice story. That message at the end to me is very true. :) The describing of cinderella's dress was good. :)Kayleigh, Mokoia intermediate
I like it how you used the real bits of the story but summed it up into a story and I like that you put your own words in it. Ka Pai !!!RayanP3 Mokoia Int
I liked your story, and the ending was good. Next time, check some of your spelling and punctuation.
Great sense of humor and lanuage!Next time put some awesome words in to picture the reader's mind.