Monday, 9 September 2013

reubens story

this is my story  remake


  1. I like the complication you have created in this story with Cinderella being locked in the cupboard at the Palace and being found by the prince after 12 o'clock. However there a lot of typing mistakes and still lots of editing to be done. I would go back and read each sentence again. Even try "I think this means" and see if you can recognise where you need to make changes.

  2. WOW.
    What a great descrpitive story that you have made.
    Our class uses google docs aswell when we had to do our scienced fair project.

    From Daniel p3 Mokoia Intermediate

  3. I like this story and i like that the prince saves her anyway. But I think it could be edited better but you can get better at that. The story was good.

    Cheyenne Mokoia Intermediate

  4. Lehman, Riccarton Primary School21 October 2013 at 13:58

    Nice story, Reuben.
    I liked your creativity and ideas when writing this passage, but I think you need to work on your punctuation and spelling. Overall, well done on your story and keep progressing with your creative writing nature.

  5. It was a good story but the spelling needs a lot of improvement and a heap of editing needs to be done